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[caulfield]

I made this in photoshop out of three photos I had. Is everything from the same vantage point - I am so bad at eyeing it. Does the composition work?

Nicole

[Bill C]

Tuff one nicole. :help: Looks like there may be some perspective problems with the ceiling, lights, and walls, those should be easy enuff to fix when you make your sketch. I think the comp works, my eye goes to the girl at the table, to the lips of the near girl and back to the table. As far as the vantage point, it seems like the table is elevated, like on a platform. Shouldn't be a problem. These are just my first thoughts, I look some more.

[caulfield]

Thanks Bill. :)

[caulfield]

Here's the original photo of the background - I may have taken out too much stuff - which is making the perspective look strange. I replaced the guy with a girl because why would the person with the girl with the pink lips be looking over her shoulder at a guy. Had to be a girl. Anyway - I did put her higher that this guy is...

Just more for you to look at... :rolleyes:

Bill does it help to put those help smilees in? I'll put a few more in to see if it works... :help: :help: :help:

Nicole

[caulfield]

You know me - once I start posting comps - I can't stop. Hubby said he thought you needed the cup in front for context. I lowered the girl in this one.

[Arlene]

i see one girl and one guy...am i missing the rest cause it's dark?

[caulfield]

i see one girl and one guy...am i missing the rest cause it's dark?

lol, you must be - I keep my monitor pretty light. I'll make lighter versions in ps.

[caulfield]

OK - I just brought up the brightness - which greyed things, but you can get the idea. And, yes that is me in front - except my playing with it in ps made it look like I have hot pink lips and bad acne. :annoyed:

[Arlene]

i think i prefer it without the coffee cup. i'm finding the cup distracting to the whole thing. i'm more drawn to what the story is without the cup throwing another idea up.

[caulfield]

i think i prefer it without the coffee cup. i'm finding the cup distracting to the whole thing. i'm more drawn to what the story is without the cup throwing another idea up.

Good... I have already started it... without the cup :) I'll post it in cp later.

Thanks,
Nicole

[Brenda]

Nicole, I like it without the cup. The cup was totally distracting to me. I kept focusing on it and thinking how awkward it looked. And it didn't add anything to the storyline for me.

But I'm missing the guy and without the guy I'm missing the story. I always read something into your work but this time I'm just missing it. I know you know where he is so I am assuming he will be more "there" when you do it? Oh, is the guy looking over his shoulder actually standing in front of the girl with pink lips so he is an assumed character in the story?

Perhaps I'm really obtuse but I missed that angle. ;)

[caulfield]

Hi Brenda - I posted a wip over in cp - I'll explain it better there - let me know what you think!

http://www.scribbletalk.com/showthread.php?t=213

Hope it is ok I started two threads - I kind of thought of it as comp - then drawing?

[Arlene]

nicole your link is to this thread, and yes it's ok to post this again since it's starting the cp work.

[caulfield]

Oops :bangin:

Try this one:D
http://www.scribbletalk.com/showthread.php?t=260